Ch18 Story Outline is finished and will be uploaded on Patreon shortly.
Goddamn it's huge though, I've written overly detailed notes, sometimes basically all but writing out a full scene, but still, it's clocking in at 10,000 words of notes. Considering I've seen 4-5k word outlines turn into 20k stories, I'm a little worried this one may end up being a bit unwieldy.
Especially since it's only got one sex-scene. That's a big chapter to just have one actual proper sex scene at the end.
Definitely interested in any feedback here:
Should I cut out the backstory stuff and just gloss over or imply it? Is it enough to be told that Say'ri loves Robin, should we see why she does? At least when I did the Tharja flashback, it was Robin and Tharja having sex.
Or go the whole other way and give a full dedicated chapter to their past in Valm, to cover her and Tiki's emotions. Any sex scenes here would be between Robin and Lissa obviously, given the time period. Or maybe do something fun and put Robin with Kagerou too, which would give their meeting in the present a reunion aspect.
Or should I trim the fat through the story more, are there scenes that just serve for world/character building that should be cut?
Or do you think it's fine as is?
Because I'm so concerned about this, I'm gonna open up the Viewing version to every Patreon rather than locking it away at the $50 tier. That's not exactly fair to anyone at that tier, so I'll bump the editing version down to the $50 tier instead.
Otherwise, all feedback welcomed! Hopefully you think it'll be a fun chapter and will look forward to it! I worry sometimes that it's only me and one other person that actually likes Say'ri...
-J
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